A sales email that makes you want to book NOW!
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The why
A rewrite of the original email to speak more directly to the reader and create greater urgency.
The how
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Subject line is easily scanned and feels like the email is doing the target a favor by reminding them about the sales they're interested in.
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Offer (prices and deadline) is up front to help the target scan read.
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Tone is personal, cuts to the chase.
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Plays on primary emotion greed as a key motivator: “save 20% on hotels”, “get Europe all to yourself”, “Canadian dollars go further”, “new experiences for far far less $$$”.
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Starts and ends with an emotional call-to-action; “escape” and “hurry”.
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Provides other solutions to escaping winter, agitates them, offers Europe as the real solution to escaping crowds and the cold.
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Shows rather than tells; conjures up images of European treats (hot springs, Belgian hot chocolate and more).